Each Day
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(10-07-2013, 11:40 AM)whatispoetry? Wrote:  The three-toothed man mocks
the fat, elderly woman.
She can escape him,
but this is the only shade,
and the bus will be here, soon.
i think this is well constructed.
she sounds really sensible Big Grin
love the last line. it's so "i just don't give a fuck"
not bad at all.
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Each Day - by whatispoetry? - 10-07-2013, 11:40 AM
RE: Each Day - by Erthona - 10-07-2013, 02:56 PM
RE: Each Day - by billy - 10-07-2013, 05:05 PM
RE: Each Day - by TheReluctantPoet - 10-09-2013, 05:39 AM
RE: Each Day - by whatispoetry? - 10-10-2013, 12:05 PM
RE: Each Day - by Malu - 10-13-2013, 07:04 AM
RE: Each Day - by emerald13 - 10-22-2013, 03:52 PM
RE: Each Day - by drithebee - 10-29-2013, 06:26 AM
RE: Each Day - by gilmored - 12-05-2013, 12:30 PM



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