10-07-2013, 05:05 PM
(10-07-2013, 11:40 AM)whatispoetry? Wrote: The three-toothed man mocksi think this is well constructed.
the fat, elderly woman.
She can escape him,
but this is the only shade,
and the bus will be here, soon.
she sounds really sensible

love the last line. it's so "i just don't give a fuck"
not bad at all.
