10-07-2013, 01:31 PM
Jeffery,
I meant the shine in a more metaphorical sense - the brightness of a first encounter, etc. I actually did play with the idea of using teeth, but I thought it detracted from the rest of the imagery. Perhaps I will reconsider this.
As far as punctuation goes, would you mind pointing out any areas you feel could use more? I'd love to see where you think I could use improvement. ^_^
I meant the shine in a more metaphorical sense - the brightness of a first encounter, etc. I actually did play with the idea of using teeth, but I thought it detracted from the rest of the imagery. Perhaps I will reconsider this.
As far as punctuation goes, would you mind pointing out any areas you feel could use more? I'd love to see where you think I could use improvement. ^_^
-Lexi