10-06-2013, 04:13 PM
Leanne,
Yeah, I didn't really like that line. I thought about "that makes one's heart to seize", but that is probably not any better. I have no idea why I am so invested in wanting to keep the "to seize". Your suggestion makes more sense and reads more smoothly. I'll try to change it, because I know it is better...I will try!
Dale
Yeah, I didn't really like that line. I thought about "that makes one's heart to seize", but that is probably not any better. I have no idea why I am so invested in wanting to keep the "to seize". Your suggestion makes more sense and reads more smoothly. I'll try to change it, because I know it is better...I will try!
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.