10-06-2013, 04:44 AM
Please leave "heartbeat of the world" -- the symbolism of the island and the implied drums supports it well. The island did become at once the world, the body and the conscience for the boys.
I had a thought. Instead of (or perhaps as well as) "when hungry", you could possibly say "lacking Turkish delight"... I could be rambling.
I had a thought. Instead of (or perhaps as well as) "when hungry", you could possibly say "lacking Turkish delight"... I could be rambling.
It could be worse