10-03-2013, 07:35 AM
"I wish there was more wrong with this because I rather wish I had written it. I am sure that there is a genre here. What shall we call it... ? Good consistency throughout and a succunct edit.Yes to this"
-it seems I am full of thank yous today. I appreciate the kindness as my sore heart can surely use it. Yeah, wah wah.. I know.
One problem I am having is with the punctuation of this:
"This searing pain that launched into
my ribs and sliced me through
This worthless heart. Its robust beat
I heaved into your hand."
Is it correct that a fragment can be separated from a complete sentence with a semi colon?.. and then I could just put a ; after "heart"?
-it seems I am full of thank yous today. I appreciate the kindness as my sore heart can surely use it. Yeah, wah wah.. I know.
One problem I am having is with the punctuation of this:
"This searing pain that launched into
my ribs and sliced me through
This worthless heart. Its robust beat
I heaved into your hand."
Is it correct that a fragment can be separated from a complete sentence with a semi colon?.. and then I could just put a ; after "heart"?