10-02-2013, 01:24 PM
Todd,
A Villanelle. Not one of my favorite forms as the content is nearly always subsumed in the form, and I find this no different. Aside from this not making a whole lot of sense, it does read beautifully. Just in terms of reading it reminds me of some of the middle English ballads as it has that same constant dipping motion. As this form started as a type of ballad, I would say you did very well with that part. That this is from a reversed syntax language (French), it is somewhat of an accomplishment to make it sound natural. For me that is nearly always missing in most of these I have read. So well done in that regard.
Dale
A Villanelle. Not one of my favorite forms as the content is nearly always subsumed in the form, and I find this no different. Aside from this not making a whole lot of sense, it does read beautifully. Just in terms of reading it reminds me of some of the middle English ballads as it has that same constant dipping motion. As this form started as a type of ballad, I would say you did very well with that part. That this is from a reversed syntax language (French), it is somewhat of an accomplishment to make it sound natural. For me that is nearly always missing in most of these I have read. So well done in that regard.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.