Cry for Help

[billy]

I wear my disguise
Till I arrive at my house
Later at night
Where I dim the lights
Low,....this line has a lot more power the would be thought possible
Close the blinds

Then break down and cry
The flowing tears hitting hit the paper...are the the's needed
Echoing echo through out the room....throughout
The words you said to me...is the and to me needed?
Paralyzing my mind paralyze

work the next two stanza in the same way.

Sending animosity through my bones
Leaving insecurities that show on my face
A constant on going battle between
The thoughts that are overpowering my brain
And what I`m trying to avoid feeling in my heart

The plastic smile fades deep into the dark room
No make up, but a covered alter ego
That escapes when I detach myself from
reality,
and I become who I really am
when no one is around
to criticize me

i think it could be cropped. at the moment it's all i'm and my and i etc.

the best way i can do a comment is by showing you what i mean love blind.

This disguise
worn till I arrive home.
Later at night
I dim the lights
Low,
Close the blinds

for me. i think you have to strip away some of the poem to make it bigger (does that make sense) thanks for the read LB