10-01-2013, 08:58 AM
(10-01-2013, 08:34 AM)bena Wrote: I love the revision and the imagery is thick...the one thing that sticks out to me is the last word "unloosed"==Ah, that last word, blame AJ and Erthona.
I can't say why it bothers me, and perhaps it is just a me thing, leave it if you wish. For some reason unknown to me I want to see it as "unleashed"
2 cents...not worth much these days.
bena
. They got me thinking of words for unbound/unbounded and brutes unloosed made me grin, a funny mouthful. Again I'll think on it, but I tend to be too quick to edit, so I'll wait a bit. Thanks for reading.
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