The Dock at Parsons Lake

[tectak]

Hey, Tek! Just been living is all, nice to see ya and thanks for all the food for thought. I'm curious as to the nit with my choosing to use female gender instead of male gender when referencing deity. Is it because I used the generalized title "God" instead of a specific name? Or because goddess would appear more grammatically correct? Technically the Judeo- Christian God is considered genderless, though the Hebrew names and attributes of God are divided into masculine and feminine. I personally prefer "her", but that is a leaning toward identifying with AdiParashakti/Ohr Ein Soph. Such a personal bent isn't necessary to the poem, it's just the way it came out as my natural conversational tone.
Erthona, nice to have your thoughts on this piece. Time to flex my fingers and put in the grunt work necessary to improve.
I'm truly happy to have such great input from everyone. It's the middle of the night, I'm going to come back tomorrow and implement the suggestions. Thanks again.

Hi aish,
On the god thing you make my point more eloquently than I ever could I have no religious convictions and so have as much interest in sexing god as in sexing a jar of pickled onions...but there are those who would take unwarranted issue with the pointedness of the "her" word...so what? Well, in poetry, as in all things that the moving finger scribes, one has to be carefull not to over-emphasise the irrelevant.
In this piece, I cannot detect the relevance of a deity, yet even an agnostically aligned observer like me noticed the almost polemical contrivance inherent in the gender sensitive use of words...yet by your detailed explanation you dismiss at length the relevance. Hmmm. For me, the point was blunt...not of any consequence to the spirit of the piece and so, were I forced to use that word much beloved of crits, superfluous.
God the father...just my natural conversational tone...or are you sure you want this distraction in your poem?
Best,
tectak