09-27-2013, 05:05 PM
Jack,
Yeah, I agree with Billy, "The year was 1653" is a bit cheesy.
It reads more like prose than poetry, even that bastard halfling prose-poetry. The sentences are too long and workman-like, and this reads like a snippet of a longer piece, not a self-contained poem.
Dale
Yeah, I agree with Billy, "The year was 1653" is a bit cheesy.
It reads more like prose than poetry, even that bastard halfling prose-poetry. The sentences are too long and workman-like, and this reads like a snippet of a longer piece, not a self-contained poem.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.