Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2)

[milo]

A terrifying poem indeed

good point, but this is the serious workshopping forum and, as such, we expect a much higher level of critique in this forum. Please read the forum rules at the top of each forum as they are different.

from the serious critique forum rules:

If possible, leave a line-by-line or at least a partial line-by-line critique, as well as a comment outside the body of the poem. Ensure that it provides valuable feedback to the poet, even if it's all positive. A simple "I like this" is not appropriate for serious critique. Please comment to the best of your ability.


Thanks

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