09-27-2013, 01:12 AM
(09-27-2013, 12:42 AM)NewJerseyMan99 Wrote: This is very well written, and yet I'm not sure what you were really intending to communicate with this image of an insect attack.I guess since my previous poems are narratives, I wanted to try a "nature scene" poem that's sort of a snapshot of a common experience in the Southern US. Are you thinking it needs some kind of "hook" at the end, i.e. being only descriptive doesn't cut it, so the imagery needs to be a relevant metaphor for something else? I don't yet know the answer to that question.