Madge - revised

[svanhoeven]

Without "sounding" it would read as:

and cars make a sticky noise as they pass by
like fat people sex on a hot night.

Yes, that is awkward. How about:

and passing cars make a sticky noise
like fat lovers on a hot night.

I was figuring a net income of about 4.00$ per hour after tax, et.al., is taken out of ones check, but it should read nearly two hours of work, as I was thinking about 6 dollars a pack. You are probably correct though, it would be closer to 1 hour of work because they would also probably buy the cheapest brands. What does a pack cost these days?

I know nothing about the price of cigarettes; I was just offering a shortened phrase.