Engineer Love Poetry

[Malu]

Ok I got the first line and the wedding proposal, not so much the annulus play on words. So I was right, you do have more depth, I knew it couldn't have been that factual. And I am in absolutely no position to point out cliches, but her being the sun, the center of your world/universe is not very creative, original or new. But then again, it ties perfectly into the theme of this poem, so I see why it is acceptable, however I think you could find something more personal that better symbolizes your love. In fact, I'm sure you could, but for the context of this poem I see no need change that. Thanks for the clarification and good read

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Considering annulus means a ring shaped object, structure or region, followed by the next line ending with ring, that is slightly redundant. As for the planets and the sun, it's not really the opposite direction since the solar system is heliocentric, meaning the sun is the center and the other planets just orbit around it. Not really going the opposite way, granted the orbits aren't a perfect circle and are more elliptical, they still don't go in opposite directions per se. But then again, these are more factual reasons, I'm sure you have more depth behind that, relating to something much more personal.

annulus means a ring shaped object (with a large amount of pucker :J:
we don't look too deeply into poetry in the for fun forum or else we may lose our heads up our annulus'

You're right we don't in the poetry for fun, that is why I said "But then again, these are more factual reasons, I'm sure you have more depth behind that, relating to something much more personal." I just wanted to shed new light on the matter, in hopes of possibly improving the poem, if the poet sees fit. Just my two cents, but thanks the reminder