09-23-2013, 12:58 AM
If this is as I think it is (the destruction of a marriage followed by a bitter divorce), I like the metaphor of it being a voyage they set sail upon - sounds ironically like the kind of thing a minister would say during a wedding ceremony. The only thing that struck me as slightly off were the lines "we set off sail" and "one soul aboard" being broken into two lines - if there was a particular reason for this, it eluded me. Other than that I really like it. I especially liked how the broken compass seemed to point to a lack of direction on the part of whoever owned it at the time.