in a cloak of fallen leaves
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(09-22-2013, 08:01 AM)Malu Wrote:  I rather like this poem, the only thing I would critique would be to have the first line and title not be the same. That's completely up to you since this is your poem, but that is just my input. Hope this helped in any way, thanks for the good read Thumbsup

Haiku don't have titles; that's just the first line you see twice.
                                                                                                                a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
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in a cloak of fallen leaves - by rayheinrich - 07-20-2013, 02:16 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by Heartafire - 07-20-2013, 04:33 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by rayheinrich - 07-20-2013, 05:24 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by cidermaid - 07-20-2013, 05:47 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by rayheinrich - 07-20-2013, 06:57 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by cidermaid - 07-20-2013, 07:31 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by rayheinrich - 07-20-2013, 07:47 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by Malu - 09-22-2013, 08:01 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by rayheinrich - 09-22-2013, 09:22 PM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by Erthona - 09-22-2013, 10:30 PM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by rayheinrich - 09-22-2013, 10:38 PM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by Erthona - 09-23-2013, 06:40 AM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by billy - 09-23-2013, 01:02 PM
RE: in a cloak of fallen leaves - by Erthona - 09-23-2013, 08:41 PM



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