my fix is cheeses
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(05-19-2013, 11:35 PM)ambrosial revelation Wrote:  
I am an addict
cheddar, stilton, emmental
my fix is cheeses.
Having the last line also be the title gives it away. By all means stick with it, most songs are named for a line or significant word/phrase form it. I would just suggest making the last line more open to interpretation by changing it up a little, and possibly think of a more clever title. Hope this helps! Good poem and thanks for the read Thumbsup
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my fix is cheeses - by Magpie - 05-19-2013, 11:35 PM
RE: my fix is cheeses - by cidermaid - 05-20-2013, 01:47 AM
RE: my fix is cheeses - by Magpie - 05-20-2013, 07:46 AM
RE: my fix is cheeses - by Malu - 09-22-2013, 07:43 AM



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