Crabapple

[ChristopherSea]

I really enjoyed this piece, and I love science-y words like phloem and xylem (although I've been told I use them too much..damn the haters!)

I think what this piece displays really well is assonance and at times alliteration....but I got lost in the meter in the forth stanza, and that's a shame, because it was perfect up until then. Maybe it's just me, I'm not great with the iamb. If you're meaning for the "heavily" to be trochee, then I think you actually need the is in "trunk is heaving" to make it work out better, but then what do I know, really. I fail at metered rhyme. But I do love this =)

Thank you bena! I am a scientist, so I dig those terms too. And No, it's not just you; I failed meter class as well. Didn't we cut class together once? Touché on that trochee, as I had trouble with that 4th stanza, both in meter and the ing rhymes. In fact, I vacillated between trunk is and trunks. I shall review it again. Thanks so much for your read and recommendation!

That stanza does read better now, thanks! Cheers/Chris