Parachuting
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(08-14-2013, 08:50 PM)Athena Wrote:  Lingerie billows
in descent to ecstasy
amidst perfumed whirl
Very sensual indeed, I particularly liked how you stayed true to the 5-7-5 syllable template, but I recently learned it is more about the content. So for this poem the content is very good and I enjoyed it, but you don't have to restrict yourself to fulfilling that 17 syllable count. Unless that is your goal, much like myself at least haha. All in all a good read, thanks!
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