09-19-2013, 04:24 AM
Quireboy? Is that an attempt to somehow amalgamate queer to choir? Is deaf meant to be death? Maybe a written speech impediment or ebonics?
Those nits aside, I really like the first three lines and they complete a "cheeky lil' piece" .
The final two lines are erroneous and detract from the experience IMHO.
Those nits aside, I really like the first three lines and they complete a "cheeky lil' piece" .
The final two lines are erroneous and detract from the experience IMHO.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?