One Night (edit #2)

[Malu]

huddling
they planned their getaway
foregoing small town fireworks
dreaming of the shore
of strolling arcades
pre-baby days

hair forced into style
little dress over long legs
she kisses her boy goodbye
promising to win him
a small stuffed toy
leaves her phone home

they walk the dark night
a bit of the old carefree
love and lust jersey heat
girls eye him guys eye her
young and gorgeous
out late, but not
as late as expected

I love the theme here, my only critique would be for detail but there is a good amount and I got a clear visual image, maybe just a little more usage of a few poetic devices to add a little extra.

Nice poem! Hope this helps