How Primitive

How Primitive

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09-16-2013, 09:14 AM

This poem seems very ehhhhh, muddy. The way you phrased your ideas weren't very clear but if you were going for a mysterious tone, you nailed it. It's all fluff. No bite. If you worked to make it a bit more concise, it would be a lot easier for readers to connect with it.

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How Primitive - by Nick - 09-12-2013, 06:49 AM

RE: How Primitive - by rowens - 09-12-2013, 08:07 AM

RE: How Primitive - by Nick - 09-14-2013, 03:06 AM

RE: How Primitive - by tectak - 09-16-2013, 12:29 AM

RE: How Primitive - by Keith - 09-16-2013, 05:26 AM

RE: How Primitive - by milo - 09-16-2013, 05:40 AM

RE: How Primitive - by Erthona - 09-12-2013, 08:30 AM

RE: How Primitive - by tectak - 09-12-2013, 04:01 PM

RE: How Primitive - by Nicolette - 09-16-2013, 09:14 AM

RE: How Primitive - by Todd - 09-16-2013, 09:16 AM

RE: How Primitive - by Nick - 09-17-2013, 02:32 AM

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