The Voyeur and the Harpy

[ChristopherSea]

Keith, cheers, it seems to have worked for you. However, are Tom and Dale too old and stodgy to appreciate it or do they have valid points? Tom has at least given me things to work with -- Dale, I realise you've been away a while but frankly, that's pretty much a useless comment. Why? Because it's more or less just saying "you're being a smart arse, throw it away, it's not worth anything". Now, since I didn't have the slightest thought of a news media/star relationship, perhaps that's where your interpretation has taken you and it's your skewed reading that's thrown the whole thing off. Just a thought. If not, then where would you suggest the focus shift to, in order to make it work? Because this is Serious Workshopping after all, not serious censuring of the "cleverness of the writer".

After I read and critiqued this piece and then came back to see your reponse, I noticed that your other reviewers appeared to have latched on to the Greek mythology alone because they had trouble delving into the other parts of the poem. Due to the purely metaphorical nature of the piece, it does take some effort to decipher. However, it did seem that others may have read previous reviews and followed suit. Several reviews of my poems suffered from the same. This trend is why I don't read the critique of others before I make my own.

Poets have been using mythological references as descriptors, in similes and as metaphor for centuries. To believe that a poem is about mythology alone is possibly from a quick read, but in this case perhaps more peeking under the skirts of other reviewers. It's not easy to close your eyes to that! /(_i_)\

I do like the new edit, by the way Leanne!/Chris