The Voyeur and the Harpy

[tectak]

Keith, cheers, it seems to have worked for you. However, are Tom and Dale too old and stodgy to appreciate it or do they have valid points? Tom has at least given me things to work with -- Dale, I realise you've been away a while but frankly, that's pretty much a useless comment. Why? Because it's more or less just saying "you're being a smart arse, throw it away, it's not worth anything". Now, since I didn't have the slightest thought of a news media/star relationship, perhaps that's where your interpretation has taken you and it's your skewed reading that's thrown the whole thing off. Just a thought. If not, then where would you suggest the focus shift to, in order to make it work? Because this is Serious Workshopping after all, not serious censuring of the "cleverness of the writer".

Ah...the withering wisdom of youth. Long may it wither....and I will have you know that my point has been considered valid more times than ...than...well, a lot of times.
Best,
tectak