09-13-2013, 12:56 AM
What you say is true. My only excuse would be that stanza's being out of place and inane in itself. Well, I have other excuses. My poems do fall apart a lot. It's part of my experience with writing poems. Sometimes I don't want them to fall apart, yet they do. Sometimes I want them to fall apart, and they do; or they don't. I could go on talking and talking about all my personal views on poetry, and my poetry in general, but not right now. But that's the beauty of posting in Miscellaneous or the Pig's Arse. All discussion is welcome. Tell what you don't like, what you do like, and do it anyway you want. I like that. You can sometimes even change the subject, which I like to do. Then somehow bring it all back. Well, that's me.
But to bring it back to the poem, aside from me throwing things in to stretch the fabric of the realm the poem exists in, throwing in The Noid, for instance; well that's something that happens in my casual day to day experience, so I figure it has a place in my poetry. It might make my poetry bad. Or hurt the poem....Well, back to this poem. If I needed to make sense out of the last stanza, it would be be saying that, at least where I'm currently living, people in their teens and throughout their twenties and thirties seem to spend just as much time watching Nickelodeon and Cartoon Network as their kids. More even, since when their kids are off at school, they sit and watch these shows.
Your assessment of that last stanza is important. And of course no one from where I'm from will read my poetry. Though they will read poems like this that they can relate to.
But to bring it back to the poem, aside from me throwing things in to stretch the fabric of the realm the poem exists in, throwing in The Noid, for instance; well that's something that happens in my casual day to day experience, so I figure it has a place in my poetry. It might make my poetry bad. Or hurt the poem....Well, back to this poem. If I needed to make sense out of the last stanza, it would be be saying that, at least where I'm currently living, people in their teens and throughout their twenties and thirties seem to spend just as much time watching Nickelodeon and Cartoon Network as their kids. More even, since when their kids are off at school, they sit and watch these shows.
Your assessment of that last stanza is important. And of course no one from where I'm from will read my poetry. Though they will read poems like this that they can relate to.