How Primitive

[tectak]

How primitive
this working of the word

that a patch on the wound
of life
may be had


Inevitably
the suppurating sore
sloughs the bandage away

exposing again
tender, defenseless humanity
to driving, grating, blasting sand
that is physical existence


Will there be no need
of metaphor
on the other side?


I lay a bit more mud and straw wattle
upon this rent, burst, breathing body
and wait to learn
a healing truth

Desperately wishing to appear stylistically poetic is the only reason for omitting punctuation, meter, flow, rhyme...and, of course, subjecting the receptive reader to random line breaks and stanzas determined by pointless enjambment. No. It is NOT poetry any more

than is this critique
which by the same devices
can be made

to look like poetry
but who is fooled
by looks alone?

As has been pointedly remarked on already, it is difficult to write poetry about poetry. This proves it.
Best,
tectak