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09-11-2013, 12:38 PM
I thought it was interesting to juxtapose the poem's matter against it's slightly forced rhymes. Was that intentional? After pondering a bit, I thought it made for good contrast. If it's what you're going for, I'd consider a way to make the contrast even clearer-- perhaps show us how lazy this sleepy feeling really can be?
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Sleepless - by secretkeeper - 09-05-2013, 02:33 PM
RE: Sleepless - by cidermaid - 09-05-2013, 05:36 PM
RE: Sleepless - by leftover sushi - 09-07-2013, 10:47 PM
RE: Sleepless - by Malu - 09-09-2013, 07:30 AM
RE: Sleepless - by Volaticus - 09-09-2013, 09:02 AM
RE: Sleepless - by Reilley - 09-09-2013, 10:44 AM
RE: Sleepless - by shenaz - 09-09-2013, 07:17 PM
RE: Sleepless - by alatos - 09-09-2013, 09:27 PM
RE: Sleepless - by cidermaid - 09-10-2013, 04:14 PM
RE: Sleepless - by blueforest10 - 09-11-2013, 12:50 AM
RE: Sleepless - by ScurryFunger - 09-11-2013, 07:52 AM
RE: Sleepless - by Smo927 - 09-11-2013, 12:38 PM
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