What I'll Do

What I'll Do

silverpoet
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09-11-2013, 11:37 AM

(09-11-2013, 09:45 AM)ellajam Wrote:
Quote:Then, in this hollow home I'll grieve
'Til new tissues, tendons interweave,
And so by morning's light I'll gain
a heart no longer yours to thieve.

This one goes better with your rhyme scheme. Love the change, so much more expressive than the original, feels like it fits.

Thank you!

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What I'll Do - by silverpoet - 09-11-2013, 01:45 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by ellajam - 09-11-2013, 02:03 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by silverpoet - 09-11-2013, 02:07 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by ellajam - 09-11-2013, 02:56 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by milo - 09-11-2013, 03:12 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by Keith - 09-11-2013, 07:40 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by silverpoet - 09-11-2013, 08:40 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by ellajam - 09-11-2013, 09:45 AM

RE: What I'll Do - by silverpoet - 09-11-2013, 11:37 AM

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