Madge - version dos

[Erthona]

Thanks Bill,

A lot of my work deals with point of view, I treat the narrator no easier than I do "Madge". Life and death simply refers to an addicts need for the substance, to state this as such creates ambiguity, making it nicely ironic.

Thanks again,

Dale

I read this as rather bleak.
"fat people sex" "Madge" "ubiquitous medium-dark
brown knit knee length dress " "servitor" "zombie phrases" "wonder how...work"
This narrator very much dehumanizes the woman in this presumed portrait here, though it's just the narrator's words.

The idea of a serial killer or rapist would make sense if there was more sense of an actual stalking taking place here. If the stalking is trying to hinge on "life and death" that's simply not enough.

Right now, it reads like a very condescending person staring at someone at the bus stop. Does this shed light on how people view each other? Perhaps.

my thoughts,
Bill
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