Tweedom
#3
This did give me a good chuckle as well though I find the humour doesn't take away from the overall portrait of the piece. I'd just say I see a lot of potential here and to either tweak the rhymes a bit (not completely necessary as I do enjoy the flow as it is already) or to not worry about rhyme and center on content!
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Tweedom - by ScurryFunger - 09-10-2013, 08:01 AM
RE: Tweedom - by billy - 09-10-2013, 11:57 AM
RE: Tweedom - by ScurryFunger - 09-11-2013, 07:31 AM
RE: Tweedom - by secretkeeper - 09-10-2013, 12:34 PM
RE: Tweedom - by Snowbells - 09-13-2013, 09:22 PM
RE: Tweedom - by ellajam - 09-13-2013, 10:53 PM



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