Tweedom

[billy]

i got a laugh out this. is tweedom connect with the coat of learning ?
some good lines in there but you have some excess verbiage as well. strip away what you can and the poem will be much better,
thanks for the read.

I'm gonna make a break for tweedom,
I may even scream until I'm sick,
I reckon I have got it in me, this line doesn't help the poem
it's not loike I'm a tad bit fick. i'm guessing loike is a key screwup but if it is, leave it in
I'm pretty sure I could be precious,
prim n proper at a push.
Call me Eliza as you scold me,
you know it gives me a head rush. no need for you know
I'll tell you stories, non exciting,
but you will listen, 'cos they're mine.
I'll wear a frock of flowery splendour,
and (of course) the sun will shine.
Then when the day has sighed its ending
and we're just silhouetted in profile,
I'll take your hand that's freely given
and touch it to my subtle smile.
I'm gonna wrap around us
a blanket full of quaint, i want this line
revel in the strange and interesting
attraction with a pleasing taint.
I'll be old fashioned in my leaning,
I'll even take a stab at droll
and when you try and get my meaning
I'll then pretend to have a soul. no need for [then]