09-10-2013, 06:27 AM
Thanks for the crit Wjames... yeah, I sort of half regret posting this, will consider your suggestions. Though I'll give myself at least this much credit;
Exactly. I'm not sure how much it got through (the lack of detail, as you say, is a weakness for me), but though it does have a positive readings (I was thinking of Becket's "Come and Go" with the clasped hands line), the original intent was much more misanthropic. Anyway...
Quote:Nice sentiments, but if some random person on the street hugged me, and whispered that in my ear I would think they have some mental problems.
Exactly. I'm not sure how much it got through (the lack of detail, as you say, is a weakness for me), but though it does have a positive readings (I was thinking of Becket's "Come and Go" with the clasped hands line), the original intent was much more misanthropic. Anyway...