09-09-2013, 10:28 PM
Todd thanks for the great critique and suggestions. The opening was attempting to reveal that no matter how the crazy humans behave, the Gods have no interest in the silly celebration. I could change that to the Gods, I suppose. I will try to address your other queries by editting the poem in the light of your reactions/impressions.
Todd, see if version 2 reads better for you.
Much obliged for your time and effort!/Chris
Todd, see if version 2 reads better for you.
Much obliged for your time and effort!/Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris