Tiny Homeless Sestina

[ChristopherSea]

I don't mind using poetry forms as an excercise to construct a piece under constraint of rhyme, meter and stanza structure. However, they should suit the poem and visa-versa. Herein, they clash somewhat for me. The language is a bit awkward too, for example, 'acts happened on me', 'burns spooning', 'long cored apples', 'sweatshirt food', don't sing well to me. 'Words wriggle like fish over my mouth’s corners' is my favorite line! Perhaps, it's better to write the poem first and then see if it fits into a form or ask whether it would benefit from one.