09-08-2013, 11:49 AM
Effective emotion herein Eileen! Feeling just a bit betrayed, I see... 
Good venue and using the chalky headland of Beachy Head and incorporation of the geology into the piece, bodes well for the specific drama and the metaphor. Additionally, choosing a suicide hot-spot for this imagined or real double homicide is clever. There’s something amiss with the rotweiler and rotting lamb for me. Perhaps, the use of both starved and ravenous is redundant. Also, a better scavenger for the carrion, maybe a hyena, but I’m not sure. I enjoyed the melodramatic story, title and ending, especially with the creepy dirge and final erasure in the last two stanzas. Nice!/Chris
Good venue and using the chalky headland of Beachy Head and incorporation of the geology into the piece, bodes well for the specific drama and the metaphor. Additionally, choosing a suicide hot-spot for this imagined or real double homicide is clever. There’s something amiss with the rotweiler and rotting lamb for me. Perhaps, the use of both starved and ravenous is redundant. Also, a better scavenger for the carrion, maybe a hyena, but I’m not sure. I enjoyed the melodramatic story, title and ending, especially with the creepy dirge and final erasure in the last two stanzas. Nice!/Chris
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris