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Sleepless
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09-07-2013, 10:47 PM
(09-05-2013, 05:36 PM)cidermaid Wrote: Please read the site rules and offer feedback before posting a poem of your own / mod.this is interesting. i like that the poem has a point to it. the rhyming seems a little forced to me. it could maybe do with a bit of expansion also. something to describe how the narrator is feeling as he wakes up might be good. |
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Sleepless - by secretkeeper - 09-05-2013, 02:33 PM
RE: Sleepless - by cidermaid - 09-05-2013, 05:36 PM
RE: Sleepless - by leftover sushi - 09-07-2013, 10:47 PM
RE: Sleepless - by Malu - 09-09-2013, 07:30 AM
RE: Sleepless - by Volaticus - 09-09-2013, 09:02 AM
RE: Sleepless - by Reilley - 09-09-2013, 10:44 AM
RE: Sleepless - by shenaz - 09-09-2013, 07:17 PM
RE: Sleepless - by alatos - 09-09-2013, 09:27 PM
RE: Sleepless - by cidermaid - 09-10-2013, 04:14 PM
RE: Sleepless - by blueforest10 - 09-11-2013, 12:50 AM
RE: Sleepless - by ScurryFunger - 09-11-2013, 07:52 AM
RE: Sleepless - by Smo927 - 09-11-2013, 12:38 PM
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