09-06-2013, 09:13 PM
Hi Dale, Billy;
I shouldn't have attached the label "iambic tetrameter" to the title of my doggerel; this led the reader to expect the lacking perfection. As to the missing half a foot in "when his time comes and he’s ham, (missing half a foot), indeed, it should read "and he is ham."
As to the very first line, there I was hoping that the reader's voice inflection would rectify the two weak OF-prepositions in "Out of a litter of twelve pigs." (As a rule, the stress should fall on stronger syllables.)
If this were a more serious poem, I would rewrite this exercise in folly. Every writer is in need of an editor, and with that in mind, I want to thank both of you for your observations. Thanks, J.
I shouldn't have attached the label "iambic tetrameter" to the title of my doggerel; this led the reader to expect the lacking perfection. As to the missing half a foot in "when his time comes and he’s ham, (missing half a foot), indeed, it should read "and he is ham."
As to the very first line, there I was hoping that the reader's voice inflection would rectify the two weak OF-prepositions in "Out of a litter of twelve pigs." (As a rule, the stress should fall on stronger syllables.)
If this were a more serious poem, I would rewrite this exercise in folly. Every writer is in need of an editor, and with that in mind, I want to thank both of you for your observations. Thanks, J.