09-06-2013, 01:17 PM
Still tinkering around with what I think could work, I let the topic co e to me this time. I'd appreciate some critique
Twisted into Regret (You'll Never be Forgotten)
Where did you even come from?
You've opened your secrets
and trusted me with your pain.
It's written in your stare
you've seen the same in mine..
Glistening Emerald,
illuminating my soul
and bringing forth my burden.
It's of a luscious Garden Green
to compliment the shining black
etched into your lips..
Warming your eyes
and casting a perceived cool
emphasised by the tainted black
smoothed to appropriate your lips
and warped your smile
into indifference.
I've told you
all I've bared to burden
and loved you all the same.
You've elevated me
given meaning to me.
Drank with me.
And we drink until we kiss
or until darkness and doubt confuses us both
better than our lips ever could.
For too long we've done this..
this detached game of chess.
Our hearts the board
Our bodies the pieces.
And we've yet to trade a piece.
You've been the passion
that's kept me strong.
And the regret
that's done me wrong.
Detached or not,
this cannot go on forever.
You're the only regret I'll never forget.
May love guide you home
be it with me, or without.
I never expected you to love me
you just left it too late.
Twisted into Regret (You'll Never be Forgotten)
Where did you even come from?
You've opened your secrets
and trusted me with your pain.
It's written in your stare
you've seen the same in mine..
Glistening Emerald,
illuminating my soul
and bringing forth my burden.
It's of a luscious Garden Green
to compliment the shining black
etched into your lips..
Warming your eyes
and casting a perceived cool
emphasised by the tainted black
smoothed to appropriate your lips
and warped your smile
into indifference.
I've told you
all I've bared to burden
and loved you all the same.
You've elevated me
given meaning to me.
Drank with me.
And we drink until we kiss
or until darkness and doubt confuses us both
better than our lips ever could.
For too long we've done this..
this detached game of chess.
Our hearts the board
Our bodies the pieces.
And we've yet to trade a piece.
You've been the passion
that's kept me strong.
And the regret
that's done me wrong.
Detached or not,
this cannot go on forever.
You're the only regret I'll never forget.
May love guide you home
be it with me, or without.
I never expected you to love me
you just left it too late.