09-06-2013, 09:33 AM
Perhaps, if you moved "my little friend" to the first stanza it might help clarify off the bat and not turn off readers who have checked out after the first stanza thinking your poem was about death and dreariness.
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RE: A Suit of Brass - by ruagun - 09-06-2013, 09:26 AM
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