09-06-2013, 07:44 AM
Tectak and Milo: thank you for your kind, thorough and thought-provoking responses. The more I think about this piece, the more I think it requires quite substantial revision, and I'll certainly be using many of your suggestions! I'll try and put an edit up soon.
Also, Tectak, I thought of your previous critique as I wrote this - my first piece not to revel in the possibilities of blank space for quite a while! I'm yet to decide if I will revert to my former ways, but the experience of writing this was certainly interesting.
Also, Tectak, I thought of your previous critique as I wrote this - my first piece not to revel in the possibilities of blank space for quite a while! I'm yet to decide if I will revert to my former ways, but the experience of writing this was certainly interesting.