09-05-2013, 10:32 PM
Just one comment - poems are still made up of sentences, and the middle of this one is a seriously tortured, convoluted sentence. "What is blasphemy..." could easily begin a new sentence, for example. Having said that, I do like some of your phrasing, I think the line "a dichotomy of fallacy" is a brilliant phrase, I am inspired by it. ;-)
"In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite." - Paul Dirac (1902 - 1984)