09-05-2013, 08:53 PM
I probably shouldn't comment on your punctuation, because I still haven't got my own right in verse yet, but I will just ask you why you started out with commas at the beginning of some of your verse's lines and some not.
I like the flow of your dream and connections, that is a way to open up the imagery your trying to convey.
Anyhow I picked yours as no one had commented and because I love anything connecting to dreams and hope for a brigher future..which your poem opens us to see.
I like the flow of your dream and connections, that is a way to open up the imagery your trying to convey.
Anyhow I picked yours as no one had commented and because I love anything connecting to dreams and hope for a brigher future..which your poem opens us to see.