09-05-2013, 08:22 AM
Hi,
I found a lot of good imagery in this poem and I like that you keep the colour theme throughout. Some of the line breaks didn't work for me, making the poem read rather stiff/clumsy in a few places. The punctuation might need a look-over too. JMHO.
Thanks for the read.
Best,
LB
I found a lot of good imagery in this poem and I like that you keep the colour theme throughout. Some of the line breaks didn't work for me, making the poem read rather stiff/clumsy in a few places. The punctuation might need a look-over too. JMHO.
Thanks for the read.
Best,
LB