Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2)

[milo]

Hi Dan,
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the poem.
I completely agree with you, there are just too many gerunds in there. I will work on them and also the other things you pointed out.
Thanks a lot for your feedback and your kind words.
Best,
Louise

not to be a pedant, but there are no gerunds in this poem, I think he meant participles. i will return later with a more proper critique if I have time.

Well I'll be darned. Thanks for telling me. I didn't know the word gerund, but from the crit I received, I thought he meant that -ing's were gerunds. Seems I have some words to read up on. Thanks again.

gerunds are /nouns/ formed by adding "-ing" to a verb.

eg:

I watched the eating of the horse with horror!

participles are verb forms that are used as adjectives or adverbs, eg:

I watched the eating horse with amusement.

active participle occur when a participle acts on an agent rather than modifying. eg:

I watched the horse eating with a cow.

HTH