Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2)

[Volaticus]

Hi Dan,
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the poem.
I completely agree with you, there are just too many gerunds in there. I will work on them and also the other things you pointed out.
Thanks a lot for your feedback and your kind words.
Best,
Louise

not to be a pedant, but there are no gerunds in this poem, I think he meant participles. i will return later with a more proper critique if I have time.

Well I'll be darned. Thanks for telling me. I didn't know the word gerund, but from the crit I received, I thought he meant that -ing's were gerunds. Seems I have some words to read up on. Thanks again.