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Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2)

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09-05-2013, 06:14 AM

(09-05-2013, 06:08 AM)Volaticus Wrote: Hi Dan,
I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the poem.
I completely agree with you, there are just too many gerunds in there. I will work on them and also the other things you pointed out.
Thanks a lot for your feedback and your kind words.
Best,
Louise

not to be a pedant, but there are no gerunds in this poem, I think he meant participles. i will return later with a more proper critique if I have time.

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Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by Volaticus - 09-04-2013, 09:18 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by Owlster Bierce - 09-04-2013, 09:52 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by Volaticus - 09-05-2013, 06:08 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by milo - 09-05-2013, 06:14 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by Volaticus - 09-05-2013, 06:18 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by milo - 09-05-2013, 06:44 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by tectak - 09-05-2013, 05:55 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by Volaticus - 09-05-2013, 07:04 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts - by Owlster Bierce - 09-05-2013, 07:43 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by Volaticus - 09-07-2013, 08:00 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by billy - 09-07-2013, 08:30 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by Volaticus - 09-09-2013, 02:04 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by leftover sushi - 09-13-2013, 02:27 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by Volaticus - 09-15-2013, 12:35 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by Aish - 09-18-2013, 05:16 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by Volaticus - 09-19-2013, 09:19 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by bena - 09-18-2013, 10:52 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by ChristopherSea - 09-18-2013, 11:52 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 1) - by ChristopherSea - 09-19-2013, 07:03 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by Volaticus - 09-23-2013, 01:28 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by Todd - 09-23-2013, 06:40 PM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by Volaticus - 09-28-2013, 09:11 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by ChristopherSea - 09-24-2013, 12:32 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by Volaticus - 09-29-2013, 09:43 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by NewJerseyMan99 - 09-27-2013, 12:32 AM

RE: Magnetic Beasts (Edit 2) - by milo - 09-27-2013, 01:23 AM

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