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The last supper (Edit 1)
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09-04-2013, 06:53 AM
(09-04-2013, 12:15 AM)Erthona Wrote: Has nice rhythm and rhyme, but the meaning alludes meThank you Dale for the feedback, I have tried to take the story line out of my head and more on the page, I hope the meaning is slightly clearer in the edit. Best Keith If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out |
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The last supper (Edit 1) - by Keith - 09-03-2013, 08:12 AM
RE: The last supper - by cidermaid - 09-03-2013, 03:24 PM
RE: The last supper - by Keith - 09-04-2013, 03:49 AM
RE: The last supper - by Erthona - 09-04-2013, 12:15 AM
RE: The last supper - by Keith - 09-04-2013, 06:53 AM
RE: The last supper (Edit 1) - by silverpoet - 09-11-2013, 02:12 AM
RE: The last supper (Edit 1) - by Keith - 09-11-2013, 09:16 PM
RE: The last supper (Edit 1) - by slanfia - 09-11-2013, 09:51 PM
RE: The last supper (Edit 1) - by Keith - 09-12-2013, 09:17 AM
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