Truth

[betalife]

I think this poem is incomplete. It reads more like an adage or proverb or something. Your meter is all over the place. I also see unnecessary repetitions ("amongst sores") and your language clashes - you use antiquated words like "amongst" then say "boy does it soar." Seems jarring to me...

Speaking of that, "Boy does it soar" is not a great line. The first line begins laconically then you have this very "familiar" phrase...I don't care for it too much.

I think you've got some work to do here!