09-04-2013, 06:06 AM
Weathervane
In sudden twilight tempest, snared in wind and wet,
I sought the nearest shelter phantomed by the storm —
Nothing but a ghostly barn,
Fraying like a snip of yarn.
So unrehearsed as I in gale and rain's duet,
I haply blundered through the melody's torrential swarm
Until I reached the barn entombed
Upon the rainscape like a womb.
The drizzly chorus droned outside; a silhouette
Of rafters overhead bowed refrains deformed
And wrought my heart a weathervane —
Oddly dry despite the rain.
NOTE: This is inspired by Thomas Hardy's writing style. He "invents" his own words, so I tried that here, too. I also tried using a definite rhyme scheme and meter. Thank you for reading and critiquing!
In sudden twilight tempest, snared in wind and wet,
I sought the nearest shelter phantomed by the storm —
Nothing but a ghostly barn,
Fraying like a snip of yarn.
So unrehearsed as I in gale and rain's duet,
I haply blundered through the melody's torrential swarm
Until I reached the barn entombed
Upon the rainscape like a womb.
The drizzly chorus droned outside; a silhouette
Of rafters overhead bowed refrains deformed
And wrought my heart a weathervane —
Oddly dry despite the rain.
NOTE: This is inspired by Thomas Hardy's writing style. He "invents" his own words, so I tried that here, too. I also tried using a definite rhyme scheme and meter. Thank you for reading and critiquing!
-betalife