09-01-2013, 06:10 AM
(08-30-2013, 08:00 AM)billy Wrote: the dit makes it better,Agreed, we go on vacation tomorrow, so it will sit. I'll work on another. Cheers
before you deit the life out of it i'd let it rest for a month or two then repost it to see what people say. always good to see people doing edits![]()
(08-25-2013, 11:05 PM)ChristopherSea Wrote: version 4 (final?)
I can't hear your music while I drive my car,
no Bach or ballads, only metal drone.
Fresh pine scents are memories of yesterday;
your bears, that dwelt upon my dash, are gone.
I don’t hear the rhythmic click of your high heels,
a majorette's march over wooden floors.
There’s no trace of makeup on my clean lapels;
no stray blonde hair is hidden on my suit.
I remember every silly wrestling match
for absolute control of the remote;
then there was the great bedcovers tug-of-war,
with you triumphant in a sea of sheets.
Your nylon stocking garlands have all vanished;
a mildewed shower curtain still remains.
Your sweet songs no longer come through steamy sprays
and floor tiles long to touch your lingerie.
I have yearned, then prayed, and now dream I might
just watch you shave your legs one final time.
Now my mirror’s dim, its silver's oxidized;
I'll never see you dance in there again.
On this day each month I buy lavendar mums
remembering them clasped against your breast
Do you smell them, darling, when I visit you
and feel my hand bleed warmth into your stone?
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This was a challenge from my wife to write something more emotinally charged
My new watercolor: 'Nightmare After Christmas'/Chris

